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The gun shot rang loud in my ears.
It was a sound I hoped to never hear.
I watched as his body crumbled to the ground,
eyes closed, mouth open, he uttered not a sound.
I stared at the gun in my hand,
not believing I had dared to make a stand.
One by one he brought girls down,
spreading how they got around.
I had plans, dreams the world was mine.
Now I was stopped on a dime.
My future no longer held a cap and gown,
but a prison guard, striped-suit, and a frown.
I was to a be a doctor or a vet,
this is not what i wanted, but what I get.
TThe glint of the gun looked like a gem,
it lay on the floor next to my pants hem.
One bullet thats all it takes
faster then a cake can bake.
Why can't I do this, just pull,?
But it's something for a fool.
Just pysch myself out, that is
just pull and sink into bliss.
1 . . . 2 . . . 3 . . .
Is that heaven i see?
No its someone, a police.
Shit! All that work for what?
I was suppposed to be the best
now all I want to do is rest.
Sink into the padded black,
and hopefully never come back.
Dear God tell mama thati love her,
and Ill love her forever.
©2007-2009 ~Elvin-vampress
:iconelvin-vampress:

Author's Comments

Okay I know at moments the rhyming is kinda forced but whatever, you'll get over it. The reason I wrote this was because I just finished Speak ( for about the 30th time) one of my favorite book as I was listening to The Last Kiss by Pearl Jam ( Arn't I multi-talented?) which then led to this. Take it as it is. please give me honest comments no nice bs! =D

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:iconkiko-chan13:
lol honestly? it's great. it really is! It has a main focus, and the rhyme scheme is well written. It shows a good part of the bad emotions that many people feel.

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Hey check out my fanfictions at
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~Evalyne
:iconkaimei-hinoke:
wow! i think it's great! yeah, sure. the rhyming has a few 'ohmygosh does that really work?' times, but other than that, wow. you described the main idea so well! :clap:

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With all our joys and fears
Wrapped in forgotten years
The past is laughing as today just slips away
Can't Repeat, The Offspring
:iconelvin-vampress:
Awwwww i feel so loved. i have the greaest friends. But you dont feel it was forced at times?

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Just because I like black, don't label me gothic. Just because I like shiny metal things and the color red as it rns down my arms and pools around my body as I welcome the darkness with all my heart' don't call me emo.
:iconelvin-vampress:
Snaps for me! BTW you still have my picture! Grrr and what did you do with the isandi picturethat was on DA?

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Just because I like black, don't label me gothic. Just because I like shiny metal things and the color red as it rns down my arms and pools around my body as I welcome the darkness with all my heart' don't call me emo.
:iconkaimei-hinoke:
yeah, i do have your picture! i will definitely get that to you somehow. and i was cleaning up my gallery a bit so they might've gotten deleted. i still have those too!

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With all our joys and fears
Wrapped in forgotten years
The past is laughing as today just slips away
Can't Repeat, The Offspring
:iconelvin-vampress:
Very good cause I loved thta picture and you stoles it. :pissedoff: I think you owe me a new picture now. HAHAHAHA!

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Just because I like black, don't label me gothic. Just because I like shiny metal things and the color red as it rns down my arms and pools around my body as I welcome the darkness with all my heart' don't call me emo.
:iconkiko-chan13:
no not really, some words may have been stressed but it wasn't to the point, in my opinion, forced. If you ever have a hard time ryhming though u might try listing a bunch of words becuase if you can't find one that rhymes you can always find one that is similar that gets your point across.

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Hey check out my fanfictions at
[link]

~Evalyne
:iconkaimei-hinoke:
hmm, ok then! what would you like? and mind you, no deadlines! i suck at those :yum:

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With all our joys and fears
Wrapped in forgotten years
The past is laughing as today just slips away
Can't Repeat, The Offspring
:iconelvin-vampress:
hmmm somthing pretty, lets see what my latest obsession. oh yeah im back on wolves! . . . and avatar. So make me a water-bending wolf! :evillaugh: I dont care when just sometime before next Christmas would be nice. :dance:

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Just because I like black, don't label me gothic. Just because I like shiny metal things and the color red as it rns down my arms and pools around my body as I welcome the darkness with all my heart' don't call me emo.

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